gdperrin
05-02-2008, 04:55 PM
I`ve tried to do some proofreading but can´r really tell if its any good I´ve used the test that was provided... tried to contact gate but was impossible ^^
so I decided to post this here and see if anyone can guide me little... to correct the mistakes.
Chapter 47: Confess
Chapter 47: Confess
Page 90
male lead: If you were serious (about fighting me), perhaps I would have lost instantly (or.. you would have finished it quickly)
male lead: It's true that you are better than me in every aspect
male lead: but...
male lead: my feelings toward [girl lead] are definitely stronger than yours
page 92
beated up guy: you... you love [girl lead] more than me?
beated up guy: Are you kidding me?!
page 93
beated up guy: it’s been 15 years...
beated up guy: over these 15 years, I always hoped to make [girl lead] happy
beated up guy: and now you say you love her more than I do?
male lead: this is what you say now, but...
male lead: haven’t you left her before?
beated up guy: ...what?
page 94
male lead: before we get together...
male lead: she was engaged to another guy!
*flash back*
girl lead: aunty, are you giving [taking] this to [beated up guy]? (1 remark I don’t know which manga this is so I don’t know what aunty is “bringing” if she’s giving to the guy a permanent thing or “taking” something eventual like a towel, that makes the difference in the sentence)
girl lead: let me give (take) it to him!
aunty: but he is not at his room....
girl lead: then he's probably at that place
page 95
beated up guy: what?! [standing guy], repeat that!
standing guy: I said, are you and [girl lead]'s relation already over the boundary of siblings?
standing guy: that’s why she rejected my proposal!
beated up guy: that’s right! I find [girl lead] cute. very cute. So much that it makes me wish that she’ll never marry with other guy
standing guy: That’s what I thought....
beated up guy: but, I never saw her as a girl!
page 96
beated up guy: we had been siblings since she was 6
standing guy: but it’s not the same for [girl lead], right?
beated up guy: for now, she thinks that I’m the only one who can protect her.
beated up guy: when she gets older, this situation will change.
beated up guy: her parents treats me well... but for me, they are more like [patron] than [family]... (if they treat them well I might say its like patronage, but I can’t tell if its better to say patron or supporter, again I don’t know what type of relationship they have)
beated up guy: only [girl lead] is like my real family
beated up guy: I will treat her as my sister forever. Nothing will change this
page 97
male lead: [standing guy] is not like you! for [standing guy], doesn’t matter if it’s [girl lead] or [girls name], it was a good proposal
male lead: but you... you ruined [girl lead]'s happiness!
male lead: if it’s me, I’ll make the girl I love happy [by myself.]-- can be taken
male lead: I won’t give her to anyone! (or some one else)
page 98
beated up guy: you don’t know how I feel! Don’t you know how much I owe [girls name]?
girl lead: !
girl lead: I want you to tell me honestly!
girl lead: do you really want to marry me?
beated up guy: of... of course!
girl lead: [B]or did (my) parents order you to? (parents: both mom and dad? of just the father?) (If its just the Father it would be better to be: or did Father order you to?)
page 99
beated up guy: but then, I only want you to be happy
girl lead: it is impossible for me to be happy if we’re together!
girl lead: because, for now, I can’t treat you like a real man (or: I can’t see you as a real man [like in pg 95])
page 100
beated up guy: it would be hard for you to change your feelings suddenly,
beated up guy: but you have to believe me. I love you more than any one!
beated up guy: I will make you happy!
girl lead: ... (I don’t know how to bring out the meaning of tat 2 word. but basically can ignore it)
girl lead: you only listen to (my) parents, are you a real man?! (same situation as pg 98)
girl lead: you are the worst! I hate you!
page 101
girl lead: let’s go!
girl lead: if you really want me to be happy, go convince mum and dad!
girl lead: or else, I won’t talk to you ever again!
beated up guy: [girl lead]..
page 102
male lead: you better don’t get too emotional
girl lead: ...what?
male lead: it’s the same situation as [girl K]!
girl lead: ....!
page 103
male lead: some time ago, I heard you talking in your sleep,
male lead: you kept saying.. !..
male lead: it must [B]have been you brother, right? You also said once, you can’t marry the one you love. [girl K] only look like him, you are getting all over him!
girl lead: you found out... haven’t you? *swt*
girl lead: never mind (or: it’s ok)... I couldn’t forget him before.
girl lead: but now.. everything’s clear (or: I get it )
girl lead: even my mood is getting better
so I decided to post this here and see if anyone can guide me little... to correct the mistakes.
Chapter 47: Confess
Chapter 47: Confess
Page 90
male lead: If you were serious (about fighting me), perhaps I would have lost instantly (or.. you would have finished it quickly)
male lead: It's true that you are better than me in every aspect
male lead: but...
male lead: my feelings toward [girl lead] are definitely stronger than yours
page 92
beated up guy: you... you love [girl lead] more than me?
beated up guy: Are you kidding me?!
page 93
beated up guy: it’s been 15 years...
beated up guy: over these 15 years, I always hoped to make [girl lead] happy
beated up guy: and now you say you love her more than I do?
male lead: this is what you say now, but...
male lead: haven’t you left her before?
beated up guy: ...what?
page 94
male lead: before we get together...
male lead: she was engaged to another guy!
*flash back*
girl lead: aunty, are you giving [taking] this to [beated up guy]? (1 remark I don’t know which manga this is so I don’t know what aunty is “bringing” if she’s giving to the guy a permanent thing or “taking” something eventual like a towel, that makes the difference in the sentence)
girl lead: let me give (take) it to him!
aunty: but he is not at his room....
girl lead: then he's probably at that place
page 95
beated up guy: what?! [standing guy], repeat that!
standing guy: I said, are you and [girl lead]'s relation already over the boundary of siblings?
standing guy: that’s why she rejected my proposal!
beated up guy: that’s right! I find [girl lead] cute. very cute. So much that it makes me wish that she’ll never marry with other guy
standing guy: That’s what I thought....
beated up guy: but, I never saw her as a girl!
page 96
beated up guy: we had been siblings since she was 6
standing guy: but it’s not the same for [girl lead], right?
beated up guy: for now, she thinks that I’m the only one who can protect her.
beated up guy: when she gets older, this situation will change.
beated up guy: her parents treats me well... but for me, they are more like [patron] than [family]... (if they treat them well I might say its like patronage, but I can’t tell if its better to say patron or supporter, again I don’t know what type of relationship they have)
beated up guy: only [girl lead] is like my real family
beated up guy: I will treat her as my sister forever. Nothing will change this
page 97
male lead: [standing guy] is not like you! for [standing guy], doesn’t matter if it’s [girl lead] or [girls name], it was a good proposal
male lead: but you... you ruined [girl lead]'s happiness!
male lead: if it’s me, I’ll make the girl I love happy [by myself.]-- can be taken
male lead: I won’t give her to anyone! (or some one else)
page 98
beated up guy: you don’t know how I feel! Don’t you know how much I owe [girls name]?
girl lead: !
girl lead: I want you to tell me honestly!
girl lead: do you really want to marry me?
beated up guy: of... of course!
girl lead: [B]or did (my) parents order you to? (parents: both mom and dad? of just the father?) (If its just the Father it would be better to be: or did Father order you to?)
page 99
beated up guy: but then, I only want you to be happy
girl lead: it is impossible for me to be happy if we’re together!
girl lead: because, for now, I can’t treat you like a real man (or: I can’t see you as a real man [like in pg 95])
page 100
beated up guy: it would be hard for you to change your feelings suddenly,
beated up guy: but you have to believe me. I love you more than any one!
beated up guy: I will make you happy!
girl lead: ... (I don’t know how to bring out the meaning of tat 2 word. but basically can ignore it)
girl lead: you only listen to (my) parents, are you a real man?! (same situation as pg 98)
girl lead: you are the worst! I hate you!
page 101
girl lead: let’s go!
girl lead: if you really want me to be happy, go convince mum and dad!
girl lead: or else, I won’t talk to you ever again!
beated up guy: [girl lead]..
page 102
male lead: you better don’t get too emotional
girl lead: ...what?
male lead: it’s the same situation as [girl K]!
girl lead: ....!
page 103
male lead: some time ago, I heard you talking in your sleep,
male lead: you kept saying.. !..
male lead: it must [B]have been you brother, right? You also said once, you can’t marry the one you love. [girl K] only look like him, you are getting all over him!
girl lead: you found out... haven’t you? *swt*
girl lead: never mind (or: it’s ok)... I couldn’t forget him before.
girl lead: but now.. everything’s clear (or: I get it )
girl lead: even my mood is getting better