Training for improvement and in need of advice ;)

[Anon]

Well as the title says I need advice on where and how to improve XD
Here's one and I'll do more when I have time

http://img299.imageshack.us/img299/5517/73462078wj9.th.png (http://img299.imageshack.us/my.php?image=73462078wj9.png)

http://img337.imageshack.us/img337/5033/onepiece482pg13doneql5.th.png (http://img337.imageshack.us/my.php?image=onepiece482pg13doneql5.png)

Bone told me you use 696969 for sfx but these turned out a bit darker then your's :(

P.S. Here's another try with a different aproach on the sfx but I went over the one small part of it and noticed it later on XD(this isn't my clean and I don't know who's is it but the one above is cleaned by me-since I couldn't find my cleaned version of this one before),this one is just to ask which way do you think is better of doing the sfx!

http://img299.imageshack.us/img299/7986/onepiece482pg13vs2.th.png (http://img299.imageshack.us/my.php?image=onepiece482pg13vs2.png)

[Digitalr]

You asked...

original page (http://img182.imageshack.us/img182/4749/65989943dl9.jpg)

- Your greys suck (where are the dots you see in the original?)
- Your last SFX looks better than your first (colourwise).
- your pages too dark in general
- A lot of detail is lost.
Compare:
Robin's left eye on the original page and your page.
the pattern on Zoro's swords
Luffy's hair in the 3rd panel looks overburned
the shadow lines on the wood can't be discerned anymore

and so on, just compare the original to your page.
Then give it another shot and try not losing the details you lost on your first try.

[Anon]

Ok thanks mate! :)

[makhan]

greys are ugly >_<
I redid the panels on page 05 (was too lazy to redid whole page :p)
you can take a look at them here:
http://img142.imageshack.us/img142/9708/onepiece49005qb0.png

[Anon]

Mine turmed out like that as well mak mak, but I tried to do them with a patterned grey(gris) but I guess I'm not good enough for that yet :(!